hey wait.. this is good!!!! i think the only reason "won't stop" stands out is cuz u mentioned it .. but it sounds fine .. like that ..

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^{I could have stopped myself, and all of the pain, because I feel no happiness from memory now, only in my dreams...}

thanx for the comment and the fav

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....It remains me of how I have failed, The tears fall from my eyes, It just tells you how weak I am, How stupid am I to think that you would just come back to me, My heart is broken, Shattered pieces of class for you to step on...

wait..it doesnt say wont stop.....

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Sticks and stones may break my bones,
But whips and chains excite me.
So tie me up and cuff me down,
And show me that you like me.


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~Addicted-to-love

I was happy,
But now I am,
Broken,
Alone,
Empty,
Angry,

OK, I really liked this BUT I think it would be better if you just changed how it looked (I think punctuation and how a poem is written can sometimes help make certain things even stronger; clearer)

I was happy,
But now I am broken,
Alone,
Empty,
Angry,
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This razor won’t stop moving,

"moving" is not the right word here. You want something more painful...like biting, tearing, searing....somehting of that nature
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Youll find I critique the most when I like the poem....it doesnt mean poems I dont critique I dont like its just I want to make sure you eliminate the weak parts-I thought this poem was very strong. I loved it actually, just wanted to help you understand where the weak points were so you could make it the best it could be

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yes it does

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....It remains me of how I have failed, The tears fall from my eyes, It just tells you how weak I am, How stupid am I to think that you would just come back to me, My heart is broken, Shattered pieces of class for you to step on...

o wow..how didnt i notice that...im a freak..i think jesse was right..i wouldnt have noticed at all if u hadnt of said something...

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Sticks and stones may break my bones,
But whips and chains excite me.
So tie me up and cuff me down,
And show me that you like me.


Photos-
~Addicted-to-love

ok lol

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....It remains me of how I have failed, The tears fall from my eyes, It just tells you how weak I am, How stupid am I to think that you would just come back to me, My heart is broken, Shattered pieces of class for you to step on...

moose.

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Sticks and stones may break my bones,
But whips and chains excite me.
So tie me up and cuff me down,
And show me that you like me.


Photos-
~Addicted-to-love

*oink*

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....It remains me of how I have failed, The tears fall from my eyes, It just tells you how weak I am, How stupid am I to think that you would just come back to me, My heart is broken, Shattered pieces of class for you to step on...